I'm planning to visit your country at the end of this term and I need your advice. Please tell me what I need to know in order to have a safe and enjoyable visit.
Use several of the modals/expressions for advice and suggestions that we've practiced so far: should, shouldn't, had better (not), must (not), ought to, (not) supposed to, could, why don't you, don't have to, and have to.
Your response should be in paragraph form.
You can start your response like this:
Holly, I'm so excited that you've decided to come visit my country. In order for you to have a safe and enjoyable visit in (YOUR COUNTRY), here is what you need to know. First, ... Second, ... Third,... and Lastly,... You have to DEVELOP your paragraph, which means you MUST provide enough support for each point you make. A good paragraph should have 12-15 complex sentences. I want just ONE PARAGRAPH.
Holly, I'm so excited that you 've decided to come visit my country. For having the most enjoyable and safe trip, here are some pointer you should know. First, if you plan to visit northern, you'd better bring coat and boot, there might be snow and very cold. But in southern, you can just wear short and shirt, it's too hot there. Second, don't try to have food in small restaurant because the oil they use is very dirty and it will cause you sick. The oil they use is from the food that people already had, which means it is disgusting and dirty. So keep away from small and dirty restaurant though some of them supply really tasty foods. Third, seriously, for foreigner in China, you'd better buy a mask which could clean the air you breath because the air pollution in China is very severe, the sky is dark and always haze. So those are my suggestions and you should better remember them. Thank you! And hope you have a nice trip!
ReplyDelete1. if you plan to visit the northern region (or, the north)
Delete2. ...you'd better bring a coat and boots BECAUSE it could be cold and snowy.
3. But in the southern region (or, the south), you can just wear SHORTS and a shirt BECAUSE it's VERY hot there.
4. ...it will MAKE you sick.
5. You said to stay away from small restaurants even though some of the food they serve is really tasty. This advice is a little confusing.
6. hazy
Gosh, Enrique, it seems difficult to have a nice trip if I have to worry so much about the food I eat and the air I breathe!
Some advice from your teacher? Do not get a job in the tourism industry in your country ;)
Hi Holly, I am glad that you are going to visit my country. I hope you enjoy to see some beautiful places that we have. first, you should go to the "Gran Sabana". There you can find mountains because it is a jungle!. If you like to be involved in the nature, you should go and see different kind of animal, plants and fountain. But you must no go before to put a vaccine that protects your body to dangerous animal.Second, in Venezuela we have a lot of beach, so if you like to share with your family and pass a great time, you should go to "Margarita". The name of the beach is "Playa El Agua". But you have to be carefully because the sun is hard, for that reason I recommend you to use a sun protection to you and your family. Finally, if you prefer to be in a desert, you could go to "Falcon" in "Los Medanos de Coro." My advice is to dress confortable clothes because it is too hot. You should bring a lot of water. To sum up, I think that in Venezuela we have all, beach, desert and jungle in one place. so, it is going to be a cheap travel because you can find all this places in just one country :)
ReplyDelete1. You must not go before GETTING a vaccine...
Delete2. You have to be CAREFUL because the sun is STRONG.
3. Your topic sentence should tell me what you're going to do in this paragraph--what I need to know if I come to your country.
Holly, I'm so surprised that you really coming to visit my country .For your enjoyment and safety while visiting Saudi Arabia , you need to know . First, come to my hometown al hassah and visit the historical places there such as , Ibrahim palace , sahood palace and al qasearya its a traditional mall , Second you need to be with a local resident to guide you and help you for your own safety .Third you should rent a farm and enjoy your time for at least three days . lastly you must visit us in my home and have lunch with my family and meet them and I will help you if you need to do something else .
ReplyDelete1. you need to know... (I'm waiting for you to complete this sentence!)
Delete2. Are you the local resident that will guide me or do I have to find somebody else?
3. A farm? With animals?
4. Okay, so I should come to your home at the end of the trip. I think I had better come to your home first.
Because you're my writing student, I'd like you to EXPAND this paragraph by developing each supporting point. However, I don't know what those supporting points are because you didn't mention them in your topic sentence :(
Dear Holly, I don't know if I'm excited or worry for your decision of visit my country. My very strongly advice is that you have to be careful, and you had better make tours with a tour company and do not take any taxi on the streets. However, once you are there you should definitely go to "Tucacas". Tucacas is the most wonderful beach in Venezuela and maybe one of the most beautiful beaches in the whole world. Second, you should visit "El Puente Sobre el Lago" which is in Maracaibo, the city were I born. It's a beautiful city with amazing food, but if you go there you must wear comfortable clothes because it's really hot out there. Third, if you are going to Venezuela you have to go to "La Gran Sabana". It's an amazing place with mountains, animals, and there is the famous "Salto Angel". I hope you enjoy your trip in Venezuela, which is a beautiful country, but please once you are there take care of yourself. Enjoy.
ReplyDelete1. or worried about your decision to visit
Delete2. strong advice
3. Maracaibo, the city where I was born.
Thanks for all of these tips. I would love to visit all of the places you mentioned above.
Holly, I can't believe that you are going to come to my countrey.If you want to be fittable and in a good environment in Saudi Arabia, here is what you have to do. First, when you arrive to any airport in Saudia Arabia you ought to buy Abaya, because it is a traditional cloths for women and most of them wear it.You don't have to wear the scorve if you don't want to. Seconed, You must visit Jeddah if are thinking there are dangerous neighborhoods in
ReplyDeleteThis is a good start, Ali, but what happened to the rest of it?
DeleteHolly, i am so delight that you decide to visit my country in few weeks. In order for you to have a safe and enjoyable journey, here is some useful tips that you should know.As you know, China is one of the most ancient nations which are civilized from age-old until now.So the most important advice to you is to learn the historic background information as much as you can. There are various places of historical interest located the whole country. As the result, the best way to do is to choose several sites and learn the background of it,or you will be confused and bored with it. Secondly,if you prefer to go to the modern city,like Beijing,Shanghai,Shenzhen,which are the largest cities in my country. you'd better make a concrete schedule and routin. You have to make it or you might be lost your way, and you will get in trouble with the transportation.Last but not least,you are supposed to learn some laws and regulations of location you want to go, because it must be different with your own country and it is useful for you to have a wonderful time in my country. Hopely you can enjoy yourself!
ReplyDelete1. delighted
Delete2. here ARE some useful tips
3. ...you might LOSE your way
4. ... you SHOULD learn some laws (not supposed to)
Thanks for this advice. I agree that it is a good idea to learn about a country before traveling there.
thank you for correcting my mistake!
Deleteholly, i am so happy that you are going to visit Saudi Arabia,I advise you to go to the eastern and the western region.
ReplyDeleteFirst reason is so you can enjoy the beach becouse we have a butifull beach.
secend is i think that the eastern and the western have a lot of places to visit and enjoy your time.
i wish you a happy vacation in Saudi Arabia, hope you enjoy your time there.
I don't see one modal in this writing :(
DeleteHolly, I'm glad that you're going to the prettiest country in the world. One thing you must have is a car, and a good sweater because it might be cold or rainy at that time, but that's not an excuse for staying at home watching sherlock or those new movies. My country is beautiful,First I recommend you to go to Peten, is the biggest department in the country, and the mayan temples are there. Second, you should ask for Lago de Atitlan, is a lake sorrunded by three volcanoes with an admirable view. Third I would like to tell you to consider the time of the year, I recommend you to visist the country by March or April. It's Holy Week and you'll be able to see many traditional things. Many people travels at that time. YOu should go. It would a nice trip for you and your family.
ReplyDelete1. IT is the biggest department in the country. Department? Not sure what you men.
Delete2. IT is a lake...
3. IN March or April.
4. Many people travels?
Thanks for the information. I haven't been to Guatemala yet, but I have been to Belize. Actually, I was only a few miles from the Guatamalan border.
Hi Holly,
ReplyDeleteI do not think it is good idea to visit my country for now. Because there are many problems in the best cities in Turkey. However, if you really want to go and support the people who fight for democracy and their rights I have some advices for you.
1- You should get a gas mask because you can be exposed to tear gas and i do not want to see you when you are crying.(smiling all the time really fit in your character)
2- You must get training about martial art it doesn't matter which one but i would prefer Alkido In order to protect yourself from people who do not have brain.
3-You should get some books because when we protest the government, we read books and we sing( Actually you do not need books when you go there somebody is going to give you books)
Finally you do not need to book Hotel you can stay in a tent and there are buffet meal. the people who protest government share their foods and foods are really delicious
1. advice, not advices (advice is non-count, although we could say pieces of advice)
DeleteIn response to your wonderful tips:
1. Tear gas is okay for me, because I think crying is important. It helps me express my full range of emotions. Laughing all the time gets monotonous.
2. A long time ago I learned a little Okinawa Te, but I think Aikido is a good suggestion. Do I have to actually roll on the floor? I think what I need is a form of martial arts that I can do in the pool, but that might not be very practical.
Regarding protecting myself from people who don't have a brain, I have to do that in the U.S. as well. Brainless people know no borders.
3. Maybe Focus on Grammar? I'm thinking maybe I can teach a class during the protest. That way the Turkish people would be protesting and learning English at the same time. What do you think?
4. The free meal plan sounds great. I'm just a little bit worried about the food being too salty due to the tear gas.
Holly,I'm so happy that you are going to visit my country.In saudi Arabia,we must get a car to go out and visit the places which are landmarks there.whenever you come,you don't have to care about the winter clothes becuse if you are planing to vist Jeddah,it is hot all the year.for that reason,you should leave your jacets and everything blongs to the cold weather.I hope you would have a good time there and have a memorable days.
ReplyDeleteWe must get a car? Or I must get a car? Are you offering to show me around?
DeleteThis is such a short paragraph :(
I wish you would expand your ideas and make Jeddah come alive for me!
Holly, I'm so happy that you are going to visit Beijing, which is the capital city in China, also Beijing is a modern and traditional city. In order for you to have a safe and enjoyable time in Beijing, here are some tips for you. First, you should go to the Great Wall, which is one of the famous ancient building in China. I also recommend you to go to the Summer Palace, the Temple of Heaven, the Tian'anmen Square, those are famous building in Beijing. In addition, you don't have to rent the cars, the transportation in Beijing is very convenient. Secondly, if you want to go shopping in Beijing, you'd better ask me or a Chinese friend go with you, because Chinese businessman always think it is easy to cheat foreign people, they will raise prices. Please be careful!!!Third, why don't you try to eat different kinds of food in Beijing?There are a large amount of local flavor snacks in there. I'm sure you'll cannot stop eating those delicious food.Last, I think you ought not to visit Beijing in winter, because it's very cold. I hope that you'll have a good time in Beijing!
ReplyDeleteThis is very nice writing, Amy. It's well organized, clear, and interesting. Excellent use of modals. Even when you say "you'd better ask me," it is correct.
DeleteThanks for these great tips. I will surely call you when I plan to come. I'll be thrilled if you can show me all of these great places in Beijing.
Sorry I used "You'd better do..."I didn't know it means a strong voice.After took your class today I'll use that carefully.Thank you~~
DeleteIt is honor for me introducing Korea. I'd like to introduce capital city of Korea, Seoul. In the beginning of Seoul, Seoul was not big as much as now. So they are close to each other. You can enjoy many things in walking distance. First, I want to introduce In-Sa-Dong, It is famous street for selling tradition stuffs. If you need to buy presents for you family or friends, you can buy various souvenirs here. Second, you must visit a palace of Korea dynasty, Kyung-Bok-Goong. If you want to traditional architecture form, it is best place. You can walking around a palace, and enjoy feeling of a king of Korean dynasty. Third, you have to go Sam-Chung-Dong, It is a street of modern style of street combined with traditional. There are many café and restaurant. You can enjoy unique Korean foods and beautiful street with coffee or tea.
ReplyDelete1. Seoul was not AS BIG AS it is now.
Delete2. "They are close to each other." WHAT is close to each other?
3. I MUST visit the palace? That's too strong.
4. If you want to ________ traditional architectural form.
5. You can walking?
6. There are many CAFES and RESTAURANTS.
I can't wait to go to Korea. I'll be staying at your house, but don't worry, I'm not a very demanding guest :D
It is honor for me introducing Korea. I'd like to introduce capital city of Korea, Seoul. In the beginning of Seoul, Seoul was not as big as now. So famous places are close to each other within 2 miles. You can enjoy many things in walking distance. First, I want to introduce In-Sa-Dong, It is famous street for selling tradition stuffs. If you need to buy presents for you family or friends, you can buy various souvenirs here. Second, you have to visit a palace of Korea dynasty, Kyung-Bok-Goong. If you want to see traditional architecture form, it is best place. You can walk around a palace, and enjoy feeling of a king of Korean dynasty. Third, you have to go Sam-Chung-Dong, It is a street of modern style of street combined with traditional. There are many cafés and restaurants. You can enjoy unique Korean foods and beautiful street with coffee or tea.
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I will always welcome you.
This is much better, and I thank you for your welcoming me :D
DeleteI would love to "enjoy [the] feeling of a king of [the] Korean dynasty." That sounds so cool.
Dear Holly,
ReplyDeleteI'm extremely glad that you are going to my country, Thailand. Here they are some tips and tricks for you in order to save some of your money, safe your life, and enjoy your trip. First of all, you should exchange your dollars to Thai currency, Thai baht. In Thailand, one U.S. dollar equal thirty Thai baht which you can buy a lunch meal on sidewalk restaurants. Furthermore, after landing and exchanging your money at the airport, you should take a taxi to your hotel booked via the Internet. Even though, there are several ways to commute, but taxi is the best way because it is cheap, fast,and safe. Tricks! you had better to let the taxi driver press the meter so that you will know how much money you have to pay to him/her because a few of them will cheat you with offering you the higher price. In addition, the more traveler come to visit my country, the more climes are occurred. If you have a chance to visit the south where there are plenty of famous beaches, you should not dress the bikini and walk around to every where you would like to. It is different between Europe and Thai culture that Thai people do not wear bikini when they are on the beach. Therefore, you should be aware all the time about your dressing if you do not want to be a victim of sexual harassment. Finally, Thailand has many places, restaurant, market, and show you should go and get wonderful experiences you have never had before. Thus, you should do some researches before you come to Thailand. I hope you will have novel experiences!
1. one U.S. dollar EQUALS 30 baht...
Delete2. Even though OR but in one sentence, but not both!
3. You had better MAKE the taxi driver press the meter (we'll talk about this in class next week with causative verbs)
4. You need a transition between the crimes and the beach. My suggestion: "If you survive the crime in the big city, you are ready to head to the beach..."
5. Thanks for the tip about sexual harassment. That's not a problem for me because I wouldn't be caught dead in a bikini at my age!
Thanks for these great tips! I can't wait to come to Thailand.
Your writing is clear to read, organized, and interesting.
Holly, I'm so excited that you've decided to come visit my country. In order for you to have a safe and enjoyable visit in nanjing,here is what you need to know. First, you have to take care of wallet and bag and remember the emegency call in China. There are a lot of thieives. They will stole all of things from you. Especially,you are a foreigner,the chance you will be stolen is much higher than native people. Second,you should to bring toilet with you anytime,because they are not afford toiler paper in some place. It is a big different between China and American. You can imagine, if you are in toilet,and you find there is no toilet paper.You can do nothing just wait your friend to save you. It is so embarrassing.So in order to have a nice journey, Don't forget take toilet paper. Third, when you visit my counery, you can find a native people who can also speake english to go with you. He will knows which palce is interested. Wich palce you want to go. Where has delecious food. It saves your time and also make your journety more comfortale.
ReplyDeleteIf you come to my country, i can take you go around of my city and find interested place, delecious food.You will have a wondful journey.
1. will stole?
Delete2. you will be stolen? Do you mean I will be kidnapped?
3. Should I bring the toilet or the toilet paper? LOL
4. he will knows?
5. interesting places, not interested places
Well, Olivia, this is not only well organized but also VERY INFORMATIVE--especially the part about BYOTP (bring your own toilet paper). I look forward to visiting you in Nanjing some time very soon.
Holly, I'm so happy that you are going to visit Saudi Arabia. First of all, in my city the weather is a little bit hotter than Houston. However, in the winter it is like Houston's weather, so you should bring the same sweaters that you use here. I hope you will have a good time there.
ReplyDeleteYour grammar is good, Mohammad, but tell me, why only four sentences? I feel like you don't really want me to come to your country :(
DeleteHello Holly I'm so content that you've decided to come visit Venezuela. One important aspect you should know that the situation in Venezuela right now is not good at all. However, I will recommend you some beautiful places that you must visit when you get there. The most amazing place that you have to visit is "Los Roques". It is a wonderful island where you are going to see nice paradise and you should eat some fishes that are really good. Another place that you should go is "Merida". There are some nice mountains that you must see. In addition, the cable car is the biggest in the world. I think you have to be there as soon as possible. The last place that you have to go is "Tucacas" where you can find the National Park Morrocoy, which have a lot roads of mangroves. Moreover, there are enormous boat with music and activities what I think you children will enjoy it. I hope that my good recommendations help you to be more enthusiastic to visit my country.
ReplyDelete1. nice paradise [where] you COULD eat some really good fish.
Delete2. nice mountains that you must see. MUST? It sounds too strong.
3. you have to be there as soon as possible. HAVE TO? I think "should" is better for advice.
4. The last place you SHOULD go is Tucacas, where you WILL find...
Your recommendations are FANTASTIC. I can't wait to come to Venezuela one day. I will call you before I come.
Dear Happy Holly.
ReplyDeleteI'm so glad that you planing to visit my country. First of all, you should try to eat our traditional food. If you like it you may invite your friends to try it. Second, you don't have to wear like the women in Saudi Arabia. Third, you have to visit our camels, and you might take pictures with them especially with my favorite camel. you have to drink camel milk in order to be healthy, so when you go back to the USA your husband might tell you that you look different than before.finally, you should check hands and kiss my family. you might also teach English over their and you don't have to bring gifts because my family will give you gifts and symbolic gifts to remember us. you must not go out in the afternoon because it is so hot. you may go out at 2:00 a.m because it is safe. you can ask anyone for help if you need.
I will be so glad and happy if you come to Saudi Arabia.
1. I don't have to wear an abaya? Really? I think Ali told me that I do have to wear one. I wonder who is right.
Delete2. I will definitely try the camel milk if you think it will make me more beautiful to my husband. If it works, maybe you and I could start an import/export business together.
3. SHAKE hands (not check hands)
Thank you for all of this advice. I would love to come meet your family and have you show me around at 2 a.m.
Dear sweet Holly,
ReplyDeleteI'm glad that u finally decided to visit Saudi Arabai.Since you are coming in Summer you should know that it's really HOT and humid during this time,so you should probably bring with you light clothes. You don't have to bring your jackets and your heavy clothes. I also recomend you to rent a car with a driver because you are not allowed to drive there. In my country you are not supposed to go out with wearing "Abaya". The Abaya is our traditoinal clothe it's like a black dress that covers the body. Another thing you should know that most people go out for dinner almost 9 p.m so don't be surprised if you saw lots of people out until mid night because the restuarants and the malls doesn't close early, It closes at almost mid night.
I wish you a nice and safe trip. I can't wait to see you there.
Excellent modals, Nouf.
Delete...don't be surprised if you SEE lots of people... because the restaurants and malls DON'T close early. THEY close...
Holly, I'm so excited that you've decided to come visit my country. In order for you to have a safe and enjoyable visit in Taiwan, here is what you need to know. First, Taiwan is an elegant island, and it was formerly known as "Formosa".So if you go to Taiwan, you could visit different national parks in Taiwan,such as Yushan National Park, Taroko National Park and so on. Second, you could go to the Taipei 101 because it used to be the highest building in the world and it is also a department store, so you can go shopping there. Finally, you should go to the night market at night in any city wherever you choose because there are a lot of delicious food and special products.
ReplyDeleteI really wish you all the best and enjoy your trip in Taiwan.
Taiwan sounds wonderful.
DeleteGood modals. Good writing.
Dear Holly,I am so excited that you have decided to come visit my country.In order for you to have a safe and enjoyable visit in China, here are what you need to know. First, I am not sure if you can adjust the air in China, I think you should bring a mask with you, because in some big cities the air pollution is so seriously. Second, you must take care of your wallet and phone if you are in the bus or train station, you know China has so many people, there must be a lot of thieves. Third, you have to visit the Great Wall, because the Great Wall is one of the eight wonders of the world, you won't disappointed, but you had better not take the cable car, you will lose some fine views. Finally, I think you could try some snacks, because there are many characteristics food in China. If you just go to the big restaurants, you will miss a lot delicious food. I really want you can come soon,and hope you have a wonderful trip.
ReplyDelete1. I have a mask to bring with me. Guess what? Made in China!
Delete2. you must "HIDE" your wallet and phone
3. there ARE a lot of thieves (not MUST BE)
4. I had better not take the cable car? Do you mean I should walk so I don't miss the views?
Thanks for all of the advice!
It's such a pleasure to visit Palestine again, I know you have been there but probably you haven't had the chance to visit my city Nablus and enjoy the tasty food such as Falafel, Shawerma, nuts, and the sweet food that we have like Kenafa, baqlawa, and so on. Someday hopefully you will have the apportunity to have amazing journey in my country and I would love to show you and introduce you to my family and friends and have a tour around the whole city and maybe the whole country ( Isr - Pal ) if I can get a permition our cousins . I also would like to take you to Jerusalem to eat their Falfel and bread they really tast so good , I hope to do what I just have written and enjoy the time there .
ReplyDeleteI am familiar with felafel, shewarma, baklava, and nuts, but I don't know what kenafa is, so I will have to try it when I come to Nablus.
DeletePerhaps I can get permission from your cousins and then we could travel together. I could probably show you some places you haven't seen also.
Your writing is good, but I don't see modals of advice.
Dear Holly,I am so excited that you have decided to come visit my country.In order for you to have a safe and enjoyable visit in Saudi Arabia. There are pieces of advise that will help you. First, you should visit the southern cities because the weather there in the summer is really good ,and I know you do not like the hot weather ,so do not visit Riyadh in the summer. Second, you must get a car with a driver because it is not allowed for women to drive there. Third, you had better not drink alcohol in my country because it is illegal. Finally, you should not eat a lot of Kabsa because you will be addicted like Saudis.
ReplyDelete1. women are not allowed to drive (by the government, of course)
DeleteOkay, so no driving, no alcohol, and no food. Doesn't sound like a very good vacation to me.
Your writing is clear.