The story is about a couple they've "unconventional wedding" because they had been members of the jumping group before they got married for many years and they had jumped over 30 times. Therefore, they decide to get married when they been on the air.they went and asked a pastor from Arizona who had never done that before.
It's the story of a couple who met themself at a parashooter club. Afeter been dating for over 4 yers they decided to marry in the air. So they hired a minister who married them while the where jumping from a plane.
The story talk about a strange wedding in which take place in Canada. The bride and groom wanted to marry on the sky. They wanted to make an unusual wedding, bungee jumping. They had been members of the bungee jumping for 4 years, so they knew how to do that. But the problem was that they didn't find someone that marry them on the sky because it was a dangerous activity.
The story started when Samantha and Darrell wanted to marry in a crazy wedding. They wanted to marry by doing bungee jumping but it was so difficult because no minister would accept that. they married by parachute jumping and they had done this kind of jumping 30 time.
Smantha Yang and Darrell Hammer hired Reverend martinez to marry them while parachute jumping .they jumpd about thirty times for many years but Martinez didn't jump before . they primarily were planing to get married while bungge jumping but they don't for two reasons first reson is its very dangerous the second reason is the didn't find a minister to bungee jump with them . Reverned Martinez never done this before he is a minister in Arizona
Samantha Yang and Darrell Hammaer hired Reverend Martinez to mery them while they bungee jump.They have already done it before. They both jumped 30 times.Also they have done it for many years.They changed thier mainds of bungee jumping for two reasons, because it is dangers and there aren't any minster who will bungee jump with them.
Samantha Yang and Darrell Hammaer hired Reverend Martinez to mery them while they bungee jump.They have already done it before.They changed thier mainds of bungee jumping for two reasons, because it is dangers and there aren't any minster who will bungee jump with them, so they went skydiving instead.
They knew each other for four years before they got married. but, marriage while you jumping from a plane thets hard to be done. somehow the pastor request what they asking for and finally they got married.
The news commented that a couple hired a Reverend to marry them while they were parachute jumping from a plane. Samantha Yang and Darrell Hammer have been members of the jumping group around four year. Because of this they wanted to get married in this unconventional way.
Samantha Yang and Darrell Hammer made an unusual wedding. They had been members of jumping group for many years, and they had done about 30 jumps together. Since they both are jumpers, they deiced to get marry while their jump before they hit the land. Then, they deiced not to do thin because it would be dangerous and they didn't find a minister that would jump with them. However, they made Reverend Martinez jump with them and he hadn't done this before.
This story describes that a couple who are in the same jumping group have a unconventional wedding. They prefer to celebrate their wedding in the sky. But they had been finding a person , minister exactly, who could marry them. Finally, they got it.
A crazy couple wanted to get married in an adventurous way, at first they wanted a bungee jump wedding, but they decide that it was too dangerous for them and for the pastor. then they decided to get married in a parachute jump, so they convinced pastor Martinez to jump with them and to do the ceremony up there.
Mr. Martinez said that he used to be a pastor in Arizona, he received many strange weeding request, but this one was the weirest. Finally they jump off and they are happily married.
There were a couple who would get married and do unconventional wedding. To date they made 30 jumpped . They have been members for many years. they were going to get married in a larg jump. there were two reasons. The first was dangrous ,and the second they could not find a pastor .He had never done this kind of wedding before ,and he used to be a pastor in Arizona.
There is a couple, Samantha Yang and Darrell Hammer who likes burgal jumping. They met each other in junmping club for many years. Then they get married. They both liked new and different things. So they decided jumping wedding. Paster Reverend Martinez helped jumped with them to make a weding.
This is a story about two couple, they wanted to be married in unconventional way. So they decided to do the wedding in the sky by jumping out from a parachute. I can't believe they actually found a minister who would do it for them.
the wedding took place in canada when couple wanted to marry in unusual way , they hired Reverend Martinez to marry them while they were parachute jumping from a plan . they wanted to do that because they have been members of jumping group for many years ,they made over 30 jumps but they decide not to do that for two reason . First, because it would be dangerous and they didn't find a minister. Second , they couldn't find minister to marry them while they are in sky .
The story was in Canada when a couple decided to make unconventional wedding.They chose to do it in bungee jumping because they had been members of jumping group for 4 years. Also, it was difficult to find a pastor to help them to do that.
The news about the wedding took place in Canada yesterday. Samantha Yang and Darrell Hammer hired a minister, Reverend Martinez, to marry them while they were parachute jumping from a plane. Samantha Yang and Darrell Hammer met four years ago at the skydiver meeting. To date, they have thirty jumps each made. They both like new and different things. So they were originally going to get married by bungee jump. However, they thought it was too dangerous and no minister would want to go with them. Reverend Martinez used to be a pastor in Arizona, and he had never done this kind of wedding before. He just had an experience on the horseback.
Parachute Marriage! This unconventional wedding have inspired many of couple in the world. It originally took place in Canada where Yang and Hammer decided to get married with innovative notions. They have been members of the jumping group for many years, and they also had jumped over 30 times before this wedding day. At first, they planed to get married via bungy jump, but they realized that it was too dangerous, and they could not find a ministor. Therefore, getting marriage while they were parachuting was the right choice. They hired Martinez who had never done this kind of wedding before this wedding to be a pastor and marry them.
The story is about a couple they've "unconventional wedding" because they had been members of the jumping group before they got married for many years and they had jumped over 30 times. Therefore, they decide to get married when they been on the air.they went and asked a pastor from Arizona who had never done that before.
ReplyDeletea couple WHO HAD an unconventional wedding.
Delete...they had been members of a jumping group for many years before they got married.
they decided to get married in the air.
GOOD JOB.
It's the story of a couple who met themself at a parashooter club. Afeter been dating for over 4 yers they decided to marry in the air. So they hired a minister who married them while the where jumping from a plane.
ReplyDeleteAfter dating...
Deletewhile they were (sp)
GOOD JOB.
AFTER BEING DAITING.....*
ReplyDeleteAfter dating (or for more advanced grammar: after having dated)
DeleteThe story talk about a strange wedding in which take place in Canada. The bride and groom wanted to marry on the sky. They wanted to make an unusual wedding, bungee jumping. They had been members of the bungee jumping for 4 years, so they knew how to do that. But the problem was that they didn't find someone that marry them on the sky because it was a dangerous activity.
ReplyDeleteThe story is about a strange wedding which TOOK place in Canada.
DeleteThey were members of the parachuting club, not the bungee jumping club.
...they couldn't find someone TO MARRY them...
The story started when Samantha and Darrell wanted to marry in a crazy wedding. They wanted to marry by doing bungee jumping but it was so difficult because no minister would accept that. they married by parachute jumping and they had done this kind of jumping 30 time.
ReplyDeleteIt was TOO difficult.
DeleteGood job.
Smantha Yang and Darrell Hammer hired Reverend martinez to marry them while parachute jumping .they jumpd about thirty times for many years but Martinez didn't jump before . they primarily were planing to get married while bungge jumping but they don't for two reasons first reson is its very dangerous the second reason is the didn't find a minister to bungee jump with them . Reverned Martinez never done this before he is a minister in Arizona
ReplyDeleteThey HAD jumped about thirty times but Martinez HAD NEVER JUMPED before.
Delete...but they DIDN'T...
...HAD NEVER DONE this before...
Samantha Yang and Darrell Hammaer hired Reverend Martinez to mery them while they bungee jump.They have already done it before. They both jumped 30 times.Also they have done it for many years.They changed thier mainds of bungee jumping for two reasons, because it is dangers and there aren't any minster who will bungee jump with them.
ReplyDeleteSamantha Yang and Darrell Hammaer hired Reverend Martinez to mery them while they bungee jump.They have already done it before.They changed thier mainds of bungee jumping for two reasons, because it is dangers and there aren't any minster who will bungee jump with them, so they went skydiving instead.
DeleteI see a few mistakes with the past and past perfect. Please try again.
DeleteThey knew each other for four years before they got married. but, marriage while you jumping from a plane thets hard to be done. somehow the pastor request what they asking for and finally they got married.
ReplyDeleteThe news commented that a couple hired a Reverend to marry them while they were parachute jumping from a plane. Samantha Yang and Darrell Hammer have been members of the jumping group around four year. Because of this they wanted to get married in this unconventional way.
ReplyDeleteThey HAD been members of the group (before they got married).
DeleteSamantha Yang and Darrell Hammer made an unusual wedding. They had been members of jumping group for many years, and they had done about 30 jumps together. Since they both are jumpers, they deiced to get marry while their jump before they hit the land. Then, they deiced not to do thin because it would be dangerous and they didn't find a minister that would jump with them. However, they made Reverend Martinez jump with them and he hadn't done this before.
ReplyDelete...they decided to get married while THEY WERE JUMPING...
DeleteThey didn't MAKE Reverend Martinez jump with them. He had agreed to do it ;)
So, Reverend Martinez jumped with them, which he had never done before.
This story describes that a couple who are in the same jumping group have a unconventional wedding. They prefer to celebrate their wedding in the sky. But they had been finding a person , minister exactly, who could marry them. Finally, they got it.
ReplyDeleteI see a few past tense mistakes. Please try again!
DeleteA crazy couple wanted to get married in an adventurous way, at first they wanted a bungee jump wedding, but they decide that it was too dangerous for them and for the pastor. then they decided to get married in a parachute jump, so they convinced pastor Martinez to jump with them and to do the ceremony up there.
ReplyDeleteMr. Martinez said that he used to be a pastor in Arizona, he received many strange weeding request, but this one was the weirest. Finally they jump off and they are happily married.
Verbs are generally correct except:
Delete1. but they DECIDED that...
2. WHEN he used to be a pastor in Arizona...
3. ...they JUMPED off...
There were a couple who would get married and do unconventional wedding. To date they made 30 jumpped . They have been members for many years. they were going to get married in a larg jump. there were two reasons. The first was dangrous ,and the second they could not find a pastor .He had never done this kind of wedding before ,and he used to be a pastor in Arizona.
ReplyDeleteThere WAS a couple who HAD an unconventional wedding.
DeleteTo date THEY HAVE MADE 30 jumps.
The rest of your verbs are good.
There is a couple, Samantha Yang and Darrell Hammer who likes burgal jumping. They met each other in junmping club for many years. Then they get married. They both liked new and different things. So they decided jumping wedding. Paster Reverend Martinez helped jumped with them to make a weding.
ReplyDeleteI see several mistakes with past tense. Please try again.
DeleteThis is a story about two couple, they wanted to be married in unconventional way. So they decided to do the wedding in the sky by jumping out from a parachute. I can't believe they actually found a minister who would do it for them.
ReplyDeleteTwo couples?
DeleteThe rest is good, especially your last sentence, which is complex (noun clause and adjective clause wow!) and perfect.
the wedding took place in canada when couple wanted to marry in unusual way , they hired Reverend Martinez to marry them while they were parachute jumping from a plan . they wanted to do that because they have been members of jumping group for many years ,they made over 30 jumps but they decide not to do that for two reason . First, because it would be dangerous and they didn't find a minister. Second , they couldn't find minister to marry them while they are in sky .
ReplyDelete...because they HAD been members...
Delete...they HAD made over 30 jumps
...but they DECIDED
but they did find a minister to marry them in the sky! Listen to the story again.
The story was in Canada when a couple decided to make unconventional wedding.They chose to do it in bungee jumping because they had been members of jumping group for 4 years. Also, it was difficult to find a pastor to help them to do that.
ReplyDeletePlease listen to the story again!
DeleteThe news about the wedding took place in Canada yesterday.
ReplyDeleteSamantha Yang and Darrell Hammer hired a minister, Reverend Martinez, to marry them while they were parachute jumping from a plane. Samantha Yang and Darrell Hammer met four years ago at the skydiver meeting. To date, they have thirty jumps each made. They both like new and different things. So they were originally going to get married by bungee jump. However, they thought it was too dangerous and no minister would want to go with them. Reverend Martinez used to be a pastor in Arizona, and he had never done this kind of wedding before. He just had an experience on the horseback.
Verbs are good!
DeleteParachute Marriage! This unconventional wedding have inspired many of couple in the world. It originally took place in Canada where Yang and Hammer decided to get married with innovative notions. They have been members of the jumping group for many years, and they also had jumped over 30 times before this wedding day. At first, they planed to get married via bungy jump, but they realized that it was too dangerous, and they could not find a ministor. Therefore, getting marriage while they were parachuting was the right choice. They hired Martinez who had never done this kind of wedding before this wedding to be a pastor and marry them.
ReplyDelete...wedding HAS inspired...
DeleteThey HAD been members... (before they got married)
...getting MARRIED...
Good grammar and nice writing!