Please write a paragraph (6-10 sentences) about your ideal husband, wife, or friend. Use as many adjective clauses as possible.
Example: My ideal husband is someone whom I can confide in when I have troubles. He is the man who will stay with me forever, even when I get old, fat, and sick.
My idea friend is someone who is friendly and funny.She is a person who understands me whenever I am happy or sad.She is the person we have the common interest, like watching movies and painting.She is a person that supports me if I do a thing that others cannot understand and tells me the truth when I am wrong.She is a person that encourages me when I am in trouble and reminds me when I am flippant.
ReplyDeleteAll of your sentences are good except for the following:
DeleteShe is the person we have the common interest.
My ideal husband is someone whom I can rely on. He must be a person who has study a lot and who is in good family. He should have more experiences which are helpful. He must love me very much that he doens't care about all my negative aspects. He must be able to pay for things that we need (me + children).
ReplyDelete1. VT error: a person who has study a lot
Delete2. He must love you SO MUCH THAT he doesn't care about your faults. (Please look at 5D: Writing #5 to learn this lesson).
There is no an exact parameters to describe my ideal women but i’ll try to give a brief portrait of my ideal women.
ReplyDeleteThe women of my dream who is independant. She is the women whose intelligence is high.My ideal women is somebody who has a sens of romance. My future partner is someone who is humorous and easy going. She is the women who is elegant and charming.The women i like is supportive in difficult moment. She must have a kindness whom is like Santa claus. She is the women who will love me with all my default.
Hoppefuly my ideal will be the one that hate shopping or credit cards.
1. "The woman of my dream who is independent."
DeleteThis is a sentence fragment. It is incomplete. I'm waiting for the verb in the sentence.
2. She must have a kindness whom is like Santa claus.
Can you fix the error?
3. My ideal WOMAN IS SOMEONE that hate shopping or credit cards. SVA error (please correct).
GOOD LUCK with that one!!!
1 .My ideal women is someone who is independent.
Delete2. She must have a kindness which is like Santa claus.
3. My ideal women is someone that hates credit cards.
Voila!
DeleteMy ideal husband is someone whom i can count on him during times of difficult and joy. He's the man who will not misleading or manipulating me. My ideal soul mate who will always be honest with me like not trying to hide something.The man who will be sympathetic with the fragile nature of my emotions. He's the person whose self-esteem is high to inspire me when i feel depressed.
ReplyDelete1. My ideal husband is someone whom I can count on him.
DeleteWhat's wrong with the above?
2. the man who will not mislead or manipulate
3. My soul mate is ONE who will be honest AND not try to hide things from me.
4. The man who will be sympathetic with the fragile nature of my emotions.
This is a sentence fragment. It's a dependent clause. There is no main clause. Please redo.
I like the last sentence.
1. My ideal husband is someone whom I can count in during difficult times.
Delete4.He's the man who will look after me.
He's the man whom you can count ON during difficult times.
DeletePlease write a paragraph (6-10 sentences) about your ideal husband, wife, or friend. Use as many adjective clauses as possible.
ReplyDeleteMY ideal wifes are whom have a lot of money. LOL
My ideal wife is someone whom has good mind on her heart and whome can advice to me when I go wrong way.
She is the woman whom has optimistic mind always.
My ideal woman is the wise who solve everything with communicaton.
1. ARE WHOM HAVE?
DeleteAs Ricky said, "I heard you the first time, but what language is it?"
AbdulJaeUk, is this English, Arabic, or Korean? Wait. I know it's not English, so it must be one of the other languages you're learning this semester.
2. JaeUk, there are so many mistakes in this sentence that I might have to demote you to level 4.
3. Whom? Really?
4. ...is a wise PERSON who CAN SOLVE...
PLEASE TRY AGAIN! Also, a paragraph on such a serious and important topic should be 6-10 sentences.
My future wife is with whom I am going to get name of Abdul. (joke)
Delete1. My ideal wife is someone who has good mind on her heart and who can advice to me when I go wrong way.
2. She is the woman whom has optimistic mind always.
3. My ideal woman is the wise someine who solve everything with communicaton.
4. My ideal wife is someone who is able to be with me whenever and wherever.
5. She is the woman who can eat whatever I failed to cook. I'm gonna follow her soon.
6. My ideal wife is someone whom I eat meal with.
1. A good mind on her heart? What does that mean?
DeleteListen, JaeUk, ANY WOMAN WILL BE ABLE TO ADVISE YOU WHEN YOU GO THE WRONG WAY. IT DOESN'T HAVE TO BE YOUR WIFE!!!!!
2. Pronoun error.
3. SVA error.
5. Grammar is correct; meaning is unclear!
ReplyDeleteMy ideal wife is someone whom has strong sense of humor, which means she is smart. She is the girl who can stand the life by herself and strong. Furthermore the girl who pay importance for her appearance.
This paragraph is not 6-10 sentences :(
DeleteA paragraph on such a serious and important topic should be 6-10 sentences.
Your ideal wife is someone WHOM?
The last sentence is not a sentence. It's a fragment!
Also, "the girl who pay?"
To whom it may concern.
ReplyDeleteMy ideal wife is whom i can tell her what i am struggling with. My ideal wife is whom i can rely on and whom i can lean on and whom i can sleep with. My ideal wife is who has potential to know a lot of things, which is mean that she knows whom i am thinking about. My ideal wife is whom i am going to sleep with for ever.
Your ideal wife is SOMEONE whom you can tell what you're struggling with.
Deletesomeone whom you can rely on and lean on and sleep with.
someone who has potential...
which means...
someone whom you will sleep with forever.
My ideal wife is whom I can put my entire confidence on. She must be the person who would follow me everywhere I go, no matter in what conditions. She is the special woman who will be by my side in my special sports weekend afternoon. She has to know that sports are my biggest passion in this life. watching my favorite teams playing is like the best feeling ever, specially when Real Madrid is playing. My wife has to be there with me in that special moments. to conclude she has to be someone whom I can share everything wether is good or bad.
ReplyDeletesomeone whom you can put your confidence in.
DeleteWouldn't you rather her spend time with her friends while you just sit and enjoy the game with yours?